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Canadian English Writing Contest 2016 Excellent work(Secondary Group)

Student Name: Yeung Dorothy Sum Wai       Secondary Division I(S.1-S.3)

 

Topic 1. “Students should be allowed to grade their teachers.” Do you agree?

 

  In the world of education, teachers plays a very important role to students. They will directly affect the learning of children. However, Students nowadays can seldom grade their teachers. Should students be allowed to grade their teachers? I prefer ‘yes’.

  Firstly, lessons will be more suitable to students after grading their teachers. In the process of grading, students will provide different kinds of comments to teachers. Teachers should make changes so that the lessons will more or less be more suitable for them. In addition, this may increase student’s passions in studying.

  Secondly, not only can grading teachers improve the lessons, it can also improve teachers themselves. Through grading teachers, they can know their shorts. For instance a student suggested that more games should be provided in class in order to let students understand easily. The teacher will figue out that students like class activities more than make improvement to their teaching method, Step by Step, they will become a better teacher.

  However, some people said that ‘some of the comments made by students may be useless or none sense.’ Although it is a fact, in a developed city, students as being a receiver, they should have the rights to say out what they think. Also, for those silly students, they are just in a small amount. There are always more polite students than silly students, don’t there?

  Moreover, students as being a receiver should be allowed to grade their teachers in order to improve their lessons and their teachers.

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Student Name: Au Yeung Sim Sai       Secondary Division I(S.1-S.3)

 

Topic 1. “Students should be allowed to grade their teachers.” Do you agree?

 

  We are now living in a competitive society. We , students, devote most of our time staying at schools in order to gain knowledge. As a result, teachers, who provide us guidance and care, become our role models. However, it does not mean that we have no rights to grade our teachers. In fact, we grade so that we learn.

  Probably the first idea popping into my mind is that everyone has freedom. Since it is of all right to make judgement, we can grade our teachers once it is logical if teachers make mistakes, students can kindly point out with certain reminder.

  Moreover, grading out teachers can borden our way of thinking. It can prove that students are thinking, but not only receiving information without justifying. We can make progress if we dare to express our opinions. Besides, teachers can make improvement by listening to their students. Thus, both teachers and students will benefit from grading.

  However, some people argue that students should respect their teachers all the time and they are not allowed to grade their teachers. In fact, grading and respecting can no-exist. Education is to bring out the best of everyone. If teachers can implant their students with logical thinking, students can make pleasing judgement as well as being respectful to their teachers.

  With this line of thinking, students should be allowed to grade their teachers. It is a kind of freedom and a way of learning. With respect to our teachers, we learn so that we grade.

 

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Student Name: Esther Lee Kiu Yuet        Secondary Division I(S.1-S.3)

 

Topic 2. You had dinner in a restaurant yesterday. You are not satisfied with almost everything about it. Write to the manager to complain about the restaurant.

 

Dear manager of ABC restaurant,

  Yesterday, I went to have dinner with my family in ABC restaurant. I am writing to complain the problems of ABC restaurant.

  At first, to avoid all the seats being occupied, we have already booked a 10-people table from the web. However, when we arrive there are no seats left for us. So, I told the waiter that we have already booked seats two days ago. But he told us that he could not find such a record, and told us to line up again.

  After waiting for an hour, its finally our turn to go inside. But the waiter told us that he could not manage to find us a 10-people seat, so we have to divide into two groups of five and seat separately. How could that be reasonable? It was supposed to be my father’s birthday.

  As I have just mention it was my father’s birthday, we order an cake from the website of this restaurant. We were all very disappointed with the cake because it was melting when the waiter take it out. Also, it misspelled “father” as “fother”. It’s so ridiculous. Moreover, the cream tasted badly and the fruits on top were sour.

  The most serious thing is the attitude of the waiters. As mu father felt thirsty, he request to have a cup of water. Maybe because he is too rush, he tripped over and all the water was spitted onto my dad. He then pick up the cup and leave without apologizing to my dad.

  My father told me that this is the most unhappy birthday he had ever have. I hope you can take a glimpse at my opinions and make some changes.

Yours Chloe,

15-5-2016

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Student Name: Linelle Lee Ka Hey           Secondary Division I(S.1-S.3)

 

Topic 2. You had dinner in a restaurant yesterday. You are not satisfied with almost everything about it. Write to the manager to complain about the restaurant.

 

15 May 2016

Dear Sir/Madam,

Re : Complaints about Posh restaurant

  I am writing to lodge a complaint about your restaurant’s hygiene, the waiters service and most importantly, food’s quality. I went and had dinner there yesterday. As a matter of falt, I was dissatisfied with literally everything.

  The first problem is the restaurant’s tidiness. It was absolutely filthy. I walked in and all I saw was a fine kettle of fish. There was litter and leftover food on every inch of the floor, the floor is very slippery. I almost fell at the entrance. I even saw critters near the restroom and kitchen. Could a customer enjoy her meal properly under such scenario? I doubt so.

  Another issue that irritated me a lot is the attitude and manners of your staff. I was standing in line when I saw someone in the restaurant was paying the bills and was ready to leave. 20 minutes later, I asked the receptionist if we can go it. He basically told me to wait and to dry up. When we order, the waitress seemed very impatient and paid no attention to our order. The waitress pretended that she did not hear us when we asked for our bills.

  Another problem I would like to raise is the quality of food. The food did not taste any good first of all. What’s more is that I saw the chef sneezing and covering his nose with his hand. But he did not wash them and go right back to business. That is unacceptable. None of your staff (especially those in the kitchen) have a sense of hygiene, do they.

  I hope that you will deal with these issues as soon as possible. If I did not receive a refund or reasonable compensasion, I will have be compelled to send the case to related authorities.

 

Yours faithfully,

Linelle Lee

 

Student Name: Lee Yuei Taou, Tori          Secondary Division I(S.1-S.3)

 

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Topic 3. Write a creative short story starting with the following sentences:

         “I took a shower after my evening tennis lesson as usual yesterday. When I     just looked into the mirror, I could not believe it I became a boy/girl!”

(Choose either “boy” or “girl” as you think fit.)

 

  I took a shower after my evening tennis lesson as usual yesterday. When I     just looked into the mirror, I could not believe it I became a boy!

  I keep looking at the mirror. My hair was shortened, my shoulders were widened and my face there were pimples on my cheecks and hair on my chin and under my nose. That isn’t the worst part, my legs were as hairy as King Kong. It looked like as if someone grew ting frees on it. This was just absurd! I put my clothes and took another look at the mirror.

  It was still a boy’s face. I was inhealng and exhaling air to my lungs, my heart was beating like drums, there were sweat dripping on my face. At that moment, I did what a girl would have done, I screamed. ‘Ah……Ah……’ Just this time, it was coming out from a boy’s mouth.

  Mummy and Daddy burst right into the room, their face were paled as they thought something happened to me. ‘What is happening? Where is my daughter?’ My mum, looked more and more terrified said.

  ‘Mum, Dad, it’s me…It’s Tori…’ I yelled. But they just didn’t seem to get it. I ran to them and nuged them as tight as I could, ‘It’s me.’ Tears started dropping out of my eyes, I cried. For a few moments, I really thought I will lose my parents forever.

  Suddenly, my dad started laugh and whispered. ‘We know it’s you kiddo!’ ‘You have been pranked!’ My dad added.

  ‘What’s going on?’ I asked with my hands wiping my tears.

  ‘It was all just a prank!’ I could not believe it! My parents wanted to get hack at me because of my poor attitude towards them the other day. Well, my dad, a renound technician made up a face changing screen just like the ones from snapchat, and placed it on the bathroom mirror.

  ‘Well, what can I say? I was pranked. But I’m glad that it was just a prank’, I smiled and told myself.

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Student Name: Limsiaco Katherine Bumagat       Secondary Division I(S.1-S.3)

 

Topic 3. Write a creative short story starting with the following sentences:

         “I took a shower after my evening tennis lesson as usual yesterday. When I     just looked into the mirror, I could not believe it I became a boy/girl!”

(Choose either “boy” or “girl” as you think fit.)

 

  I took a shower after my evening tennis lesson as usual yesterday. When I just looked into the mirror, I could not believe it I became a boy!

  I screamed in terror as what I saw in the mirror was not the person that I was. It was in a boy I did not recognize. I checked my body parts one by one to see if it was just my face, but no. I really became a boy! I fainted as soon as I’ve seen every single part of my new body. I did not like any piece of it.

  When I woke up, I found myself sleeping in someone’s bedroom. I wasn’t in my own house, but I know that I was far away from home just by looking at the time and the color of the sky. I got up, left the bedroom, and started marching down the staircase. As soon as I got to the middle of the staircase, I heard a scream coming from below. I crouched down and peeked through the tiny gap I found between the handlebars. What I saw was even more terrifying than what was going on to me some kind of ugly-looking creature was digging their way through a little girls’ stomach! I saw blood and organs scattered on the floor, also saw the girl struggling to get off the table she was tied onto. The way they clawed into her body was brutal. As I was watching her suffer, behind me I heard a growl it was one of those deformed creatures! I tried to scream but nothing came out. What was wrong? I suddenly became mute! Everything happening at this moment was very confusing. It changed 180° around all so sudden. I was a girl again, the little girl on the table changed to be the ‘monster’, and the thing that was being tortured was a pug. The creature behind me vanished, which made my anxiety grow deeper. The house turned pitch black as I reached to the power button near the ceiling and pulled the lever. ‘Help’, I heard the last cry before I felt a hit in my head. I forgot what had happen after that.

  My eyes were wide open then, I found myself in my bathroom, back in my own body, I ying in the bathtub. I must’ve hit my head during my shower. On, thank goodness it was just a stupid nightmare! From now on, I will never, watch any more horror movies like that!

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